Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?
Nowadays,
places
that have extreme circumstances become exciting vacation destinations
for many people
. Though this
might sound odd, there have been advantages and disadvantages towards this
matters
, for me personally having an experience in those conditions Fix the agreement mistake
matter
have
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has
much
benefits when it is being supervised by local guides and with Change the quantifier
many
a
good preparation.
Visiting difficult Remove the article
apply
destinations
become a trend because people
think it must have been
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is
worthy
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worth
to go
somewhere that Change the verb form
going
are
not really common for a lot of Change the verb form
is
people
. It gives them the feeling of pride and reliefs
to visit Fix the agreement mistake
relief
such
locations, aside from that, people
thing
they would have a chance to find something Correct your spelling
think
that
is has
not been discovered. Change the verb form
has
This
would not be such
a problem if there is someone that know the challenge that they would face in the destinations
, therefore
, local guides have to take a huge role on
the Change preposition
in
expenditions
.
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expeditions
expedition
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visiting Correct your spelling
Although
such
places
have
many advantages, there are several negatives that Correct subject-verb agreement
has
people
need to take notes
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note
before
going Change preposition
of before
on
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to
those extreme destination
, one of which would be that we cannot really predict nature and what comes with it. Change the determiner
that extreme destination
those extreme destinations
Consequently
, as a tourists
with Correct the article-noun agreement
a tourist
tourists
such
eagerness to discover what is undiscovered, we have to always prepare for the worst, whether bring
tools that Wrong verb form
bringing
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are neccessary
neccessary
in extreme circumstancesCorrect your spelling
necessary
,
or Remove the comma
apply
prepare
extra amenities alongside. Aside from nature and what's in it, Wrong verb form
preparing
places
with hard conditions such
as desert
or Fix the agreement mistake
deserts
antartic
do not have many Correct your spelling
antarctic
Antarctica
human
that Change to a plural noun
humans
lived
close by, Wrong verb form
live
thus
, when it would be hard if we need
some help at the time.
In conclusion, with those Wrong verb form
needed
adverses
and benefits that Correct your spelling
adverse
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comes
with visiting difficult Correct subject-verb agreement
come
destinations
, people
do not neccessarily
need to avoid those Correct your spelling
necessarily
places
, the decent thing to do is prepare for the worst and not being
over-confident to not doing research beforehand because I think the visit would be worth to a person's eyes and experience.Wrong verb form
be
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task achievement
Your essay would greatly benefit from more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning actual challenges faced by tourists in the Sahara desert or Antarctic, and how they prepared for or overcame these challenges, would add depth to your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Improve the coherence of your essay by ensuring each paragraph flows logically to the next. Using more transitional phrases like 'moreover,' 'furthermore,' or 'on the other hand' can help connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Pay close attention to grammatical details such as subject-verb agreement and the use of articles ('a', 'an', 'the'). Small errors can distract readers from your main points.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a strong conclusion, which help to frame your essay well.
task achievement
Your main points are relevant and cover both the advantages and disadvantages effectively.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a thoughtful engagement with the topic, suggesting deep consideration of the advantages and disadvantages.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...