If you could make two changes in the educational system of your country, what aspects would you change? Support your ideas with reasons and examples and discuss how the changes you suggest would improve the system.

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system is

along with

the advancement of science. There

has

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been some changes in terms of

education

, especially in Indonesia.

However

, there are two

things

that could be done to improve the

education

quality. Here

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my explanations.

First,

the

education

systems in Indonesia, especially for adolescents which

is included

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elementary level, junior high level, and senior high level, emphasize

in

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theories delivery and only

small

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a small

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portion

in

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practical activities. In my opinion, practical

things

are important in

education

, because the purposes of learning

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to improve the thinking skills are to get a good job and to get a good salary.

Moreover

, to achieve those

things

, the practical

things

also

have a role.

For instance

, you know about the formula of Newton's Law I but without implementing it, you don't know its usage.

In addition

, some practical activities

also

have benefits increasing

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creativity and

also

increasing

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IQ.

Second,

the

education

system right now, sees

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scientific

sebjects

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subjects

, like math, physics,

chemical

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, and biology are

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important

subjects

. These

subjects

are

also

used to measure the

students'

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student's

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academic performance. I think

this

isn't fair because every students have their own abilities. Some students are good at art,

while

maybe the other are good at sciences.

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that

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, the

education

systems should provide an important space for

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non-scientific

subjects

too. In conclusion, I think

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to increase

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the

intelectual

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intellect

, the

education

systems should

also

give provision in terms of practical skills to help them get a good job in the future, and

also

this

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these

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things

can

inderectly

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indirectly

lead to

increase

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an increase

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the IQ.

Also

, the

education

system

,

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should give a fair marking for those who don't have talent in science

subjects

but have talent in

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art or non-science

subjects

.