The graph below shows the consumption of fast food( in grams per week) in the UK from 1970 to 1990

The graph below shows the consumption of fast food( in grams per week) in the UK from 1970 to 1990
The line graph highlights data on how much savoury food was consumed on a weekly basis by
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citizens over a couple of decades. Units are measured in grams per week.
Overall
, It is evident from the graph that there have been significant increases in the consumption of Fish and
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during the second decade,
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the pizza the
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ate declined steadily over the whole period in
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question. It is
also
noteworthy
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that Pizza was the most popular at the beginning of the time, and It ,
however
, ended up being the
last
on the list in the end. Turning to the details, As for the amount of Fish&Chips consumed by
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people, It began at under 100 and saw a slight rise to 100 in the first quarter of
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.
Subsequently
, the figure started to increase, peaking at 500 grams per week in 1990. Meanwhile, the same was true for the trend of
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. It began at around 50, and
then
there was a marginal increase to just above 100 before experiencing a rapid upward trend
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300 in the final year.
In contrast
, The pizza
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by the
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went
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opposite
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direction. Starting at 300 grams weekly in 1970, the figure
then
dropped slowly to approximately 200, after which It remained constant at 200 for the rest of the period.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words british with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • surge
  • fluctuate
  • consumption patterns
  • dietary habits
  • processed food
  • socio-economic factors
  • percentage increase
  • marked rise
  • saturation point
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