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The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries

The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries
Contained in the table is
the
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information about the
amount
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 of
water
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 used for three different purposes in six
nations
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. Generally, all of
six
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the six
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nations
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 mostly used
water
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 for agriculture.
Whereas
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 the
amount
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 of
water
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 used in domesticity was the lowest except
Australia
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in Australia
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 and
Russia
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 where industrial
water
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usage
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 was the lowest. Looking at the figure in
further
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details
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detail
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, it is clear to
said
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say
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 that
the
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 huge
amount
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 of
water
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 was used for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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.
Additionally
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,
Russia
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 was the
countries
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country
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that
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where
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 agricultural
water
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usage
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 was the highest in all
nations
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. Another worthy point is the
amount
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 of
water
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 used in domesticity in Australia and Canada was
further
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 higher than other
nations
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,
while
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 these two countries used over 200m3
water
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 for domestic section. Turning to the remaining statistic. it is evident that most countries use
water
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 for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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 less than other sections with the exception was Australia and
Russia
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 where industrial
water
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usage
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 was the lowest. Another point
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that need
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need
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needs
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 to
consider
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 is that
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Russia
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used
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use
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water
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of water
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 for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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was
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has
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 doubled
of
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that of
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 China and the UK.
Moreover
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, Industrial
water
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usage
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 in the UK was nearly
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half of Turkey.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, water, nations, russia, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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