Writing Task 1 The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
The chart imparts
detail
about the percentage of obese males and Fix the agreement mistake
details
females
in Australia from 1980 by
2010.
A glance at the bar chart provided reveals that, Overweight Change preposition
to
men
were growing dramatically year
by year
. As for females
are concerned. Overweight women
were promoting
Wrong verb form
promoted
year
to year
in Australia. In 1980 year
over 40% of men
acquired over fit. 30% of females
supersized
. That was higher than the figure for males by about 5%.
Individuals who were filling out. They filled out via breaking hormones or eating more meals. 50%of Add a missing verb
are supersized
men
supersized
in Australia by 1990 Add a missing verb
were supersized
year
.
At that time, 40% of women
participated.Obesity
raised
dramatically. Wrong verb form
has risen
That is
to say, 70% of men
. Females
consists
of 50 Wrong verb form
consisted
percentage
in 2000.
There were Replace the word
per cent
difference
Fix the agreement mistake
differences
about
20%. Overweight Change preposition
of about
men
decreased during the 10 years in2010
Correct your spelling
in 2010
year
. About 68 percentage
of Replace the word
per cent
men
. However
, Women
's fit did not alter by 2010 year
. Women
's obesity
was fewer than men
's obesity
and women
's fit
was superior to Replace the word
fitness
men
's obesity
.Submitted by Shaxnoza on
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, men, year, women, obesity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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