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Writing Task 1 The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010

Writing Task 1 The chart gives information about the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia from 1980 to 2010
#information #percentage #men #women #australia
The chart imparts
detail
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details
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 about the percentage of obese males and
females
 in Australia from 1980
by
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 2010. A glance at the bar chart provided reveals that, Overweight
men
 were growing dramatically
year
 by
year
. As for
females
 are concerned. Overweight
women
 were
promoting
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promoted
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year
 to
year
 in Australia. In 1980
year
 over 40% of
men
 acquired over fit. 30% of
females
supersized
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 . That was higher than the figure for males by about 5%. Individuals who were filling out. They filled out via breaking hormones or eating more meals. 50%of
men
supersized
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were supersized
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 in Australia by 1990
year
. At that time, 40% of
women
 participated.
Obesity
raised
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has risen
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 dramatically.
That is
 to say, 70% of
men
.
Females
consists
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consisted
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 of 50
percentage
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per cent
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 in 2000. There were
difference
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differences
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about
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of about
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 20%. Overweight
men
 decreased during the 10 years
in2010
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in 2010
year
. About 68
percentage
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per cent
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 of
men
.
However
,
Women
's fit did not alter by 2010
year
.
Women
's
obesity
 was fewer than
men
's
obesity
 and
women
's
fit
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fitness
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 was superior to
men
's
obesity
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, men, year, women, obesity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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