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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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This
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 analytic report provides information pertaining to the six different
cities
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'
subway
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 systems. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that the earlier the
subway
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system
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 is constructed, the longer the route is.
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, it is noteworthy that, despite the fact that the Los Angeles underground train
system
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 is the newest, its passenger per
year
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 was almost the lowest among other
cities
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. Looking at the figures in
further
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 detail, it is evident that Tokyo experienced the highest number of
passengers
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 per
year
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, hitting 1927
million
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passengers
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,
while
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 the
passengers
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 per
year
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 in Paris and London are recorded at 1191
million
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 and 775
million
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passengers
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, respectively. With regards to Washington DC, where 144
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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 opt for it.
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, the figures for Kyoto and Los Angeles are significantly lower, representing 45 and 50
passengers
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 in that order. Turning to the remaining statistics, it can be observed that the underground railway
system
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 of London is the longest route, which obviously dominates the other
cities
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 at 394 kilometres,
whereas
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 other
cities
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' routes range between 11 kilometres and 127 kilometres. Moving onto the date of opening, Los Angeles has the newest
subway
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system
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 opened in 2001, followed by Kyoto and Washington DC which were inaugurated in 1981 and 1976, respectively.
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, other
cities
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 were opening their
subway
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 systems comparably sooner, ranging from 1963 to 1927.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, subway, system, year, passengers, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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