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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of exports from
Australia
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 to 4 countries including
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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, and India from 1990 to 2012.
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, there was an increase in the percentages of exported goods to
China
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 and India, with the most drastic rise being seen in the figure
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of
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China
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,
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 a gradual decline could be witnessed in
Japan
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 and the US.
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, the data of exports to
Japan
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 remained at the highest position, after being overtaken by
China
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 in the final years. The amount of products transported from
Australia
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 to
Japan
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 started at roughly 26% in 1990, after which it experienced a slight drop to 20% in 1995, before ending the period at around 17% in 2012. Meanwhile, the figure for the exported goods to the US was at 11%, followed by several gradual fluctuations to 7% in the
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 year. 2% of
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Australia
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Australian
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 products were delivered to
China
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 in 1990, with a marginal growth to 5% in 2000 and a final considerable rise to approximately 28% in 2012. Simultaneously, similar changes can be seen in the figure for
Australia
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's exports to India, which began at just over 1% and remained constantly at the same position in the next 10 years, before ending the period at precisely 5% in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
  • analyze
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
  • political events
  • Country A/B/C/D
  • trends
  • insights
  • compare/comparison
  • examine
  • reveal
  • indicate
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