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You want to learn a language. A teacher who teaches this language lives near the area where you live. Write a letter to the teacher. In your letter: - say how you came to know about him/her - explain why you want to learn this language - ask what help he/she can offer

#language #teacher #lives #area #offer
Dear Mr. Waugh, I am writing
this
 letter to
know
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 about
French
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the French
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 language
classes
 which you take in
evening
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the evening
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 from 5pm to 8pm. I came to know about
classes
 when I saw a billboard of your
classes
’ advertisement in my vicinity. The
classes
 are very popular among the localities living in my community. I am planning to migrate to Canada later
this
 year. So, I want to learn
French
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 language. It will boost my profile score and brighten up my chances of
migration
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 to Canada. I have done
basic
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a basic
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 course in French and want to achieve fluency in it. I saw your advertisement
of
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for
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 conducting
advances
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advanced
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classes
of
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in
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French
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the French
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 language. With your guidance and
support
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support,
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 I can achieve my goal of being fluent in French in
short
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a short
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 period of time. I am very much interested in joining
advance
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 level
of
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French
classes
 in your institute. I look forward to your response. Yours sincerely, James Martin
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task achievement
Your letter is clear and easy to understand, but adding a few more specific details about how learning French will help you in Canada can improve the content.
coherence cohesion
Consider checking for minor grammatical errors or awkward phrasing to make your letter more polished.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task, clearly explaining how you came to know about the classes and why you want to learn French.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a logical structure, with a clear beginning, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making your writing organized and easy to follow.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is suitable for a formal request, showing respect and politeness.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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