Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: • thank them for the holiday and the photos • explain why you didn't write earlier • invite them to come and stay with you
Dear my besties.
Thank you very much first of all for a great vacation and special thanks for
photos
that we took on holiday . I took them from postage Correct article usage
the photos
then
I remember to write this
letter
to you and in my opinion I never forget those days as I did things that I have never done in my whole life . Now I’m sitting and looking at photos
and I think the best place that we went Correct article usage
the photos
was
Change preposition
to was
Alp
mountains Correct article usage
the Alp
however
I don’t know how did
you Verb problem
apply
take
Wrong verb form
took
photos
top of the mountain as you know that place was too cold.
However
sorry for the late reply to your letter
because after I had come my
Correct pronoun usage
apply
home
I went to
another trip with my parents , a week later we returned Change preposition
on
our
Correct pronoun usage
apply
home
and I forget
about the Wrong verb form
forgot
letter
therefore
I did not replied
but you sent my Change the verb form
reply
photos
and I also
write this
letter
to you.
I just showed the
pictures and told Correct pronoun usage
them the
her the
him the
everything
about Correct pronoun usage
them everything
her everything
him everything
holiday
to my mom and she said ‘’Add an article
a holiday
the holiday
you
should invite your friends to our Capitalize word
You
home
as I want to meet them and talk with them”, therefore
I invite
you to our Wrong verb form
am inviting
home
for Monday’s party because on Monday my mother’s birthday and you should stay our home
because I’ll show you the town that we live , there are different interesting places. Your invite
is significant Replace the word
invitation
for
me and I hope you’ll come .
Asad.Change preposition
to
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coherence cohesion
Try to structure your letter more clearly. For example, start a new paragraph when addressing a new idea, such as when explaining why your reply was delayed or inviting your friends to visit.
coherence cohesion
Ensure you use proper punctuation and avoid run-on sentences. For example, break down sentences that are too long to improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
You could elaborate a bit more on why the Alp mountains were your favorite, or give more specific details about the photos to make the letter more engaging.
task achievement
Consider a more formal tone in some parts of your letter, especially when inviting your friends to an event. This will help to ensure the tone remains suitable throughout the letter.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task: thanking your friends, explaining the delay, and extending an invitation.
task achievement
The overall tone of your letter is warm and friendly, which is very suitable given the context and the relationship you are describing.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a nice blend of personal experiences and future plans, which keeps the reader engaged.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.