Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: • thank them for the holiday and the photos • explain why you didn't write earlier • invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear my besties. Thank you very much first of all for a great vacation and special thanks for

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photos

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the photos

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that we took on holiday . I took them from postage

then

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I remember to write

this

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letter

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to you and in my opinion I never forget those days as I did things that I have never done in my whole life . Now I’m sitting and looking at

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photos

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the photos

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and I think the best place that we went

was

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to was

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Alp

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the Alp

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mountains

however

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I don’t know how

did

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apply

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you

take

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took

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photos

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top of the mountain as you know that place was too cold.

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sorry for the late reply to your

letter

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because after I had come

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apply

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home

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I went

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another trip with my parents , a week later we returned

our

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apply

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home

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and I

forget

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forgot

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about the

letter

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therefore

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I did not

replied

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but you sent my

photos

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and I

also

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write

this

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letter

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to you. I just showed

the

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them the

her the

him the

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pictures and told

everything

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them everything

her everything

him everything

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about

holiday

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a holiday

the holiday

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to my mom and she said ‘’

you

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You

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should invite your friends to our

home

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as I want to meet them and talk with them”,

therefore

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invite

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am inviting

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you to our

home

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for Monday’s party because on Monday my mother’s birthday and you should stay our

home

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because I’ll show you the town that we live , there are different interesting places. Your

invite

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is significant

for

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me and I hope you’ll come . Asad.

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coherence cohesion

Try to structure your letter more clearly. For example, start a new paragraph when addressing a new idea, such as when explaining why your reply was delayed or inviting your friends to visit.

coherence cohesion

Ensure you use proper punctuation and avoid run-on sentences. For example, break down sentences that are too long to improve readability and coherence.

task achievement

You could elaborate a bit more on why the Alp mountains were your favorite, or give more specific details about the photos to make the letter more engaging.

task achievement

Consider a more formal tone in some parts of your letter, especially when inviting your friends to an event. This will help to ensure the tone remains suitable throughout the letter.

task achievement

You have successfully addressed all parts of the task: thanking your friends, explaining the delay, and extending an invitation.

task achievement

The overall tone of your letter is warm and friendly, which is very suitable given the context and the relationship you are describing.

coherence cohesion

Your letter has a nice blend of personal experiences and future plans, which keeps the reader engaged.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

242 words

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