The pie chart shows the proportion of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. It also indicates the results of surveys asking visitors how they felt about their visit during the same two periods
The pie chart shows the proportion of
visitors
to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. It Use synonyms
also
indicates the results of surveys asking Linking Words
visitors
how they felt about their visit during the same two periods. Use synonyms
Overall
, there is a development in the total Linking Words
number
of visits and percentage of satisfied and very satisfied answers, Use synonyms
while
the proportion of very dissatisfied and dissatisfied respondents decreases. Looking at the details, it is Linking Words
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that the total Change the word
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number
of Use synonyms
visitors
significantly increased from 74,000 to 92,000 during the year after the Museum was refurbished. Use synonyms
In addition
, comparing the Linking Words
number
of satisfied Use synonyms
visitors
we can Use synonyms
also
see an upward trend (it increased from 30% and 40% after the Linking Words
refubrishment
). Correct your spelling
refurbishment
Similarly
, the Linking Words
number
of very satisfied Use synonyms
visitors
increased by 20%. Use synonyms
In contrast
, the percentage of dissatisfaction decreased from 40% to 15%. The Linking Words
number
of dissatisfied decreases halved. Use synonyms
While
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number
of Use synonyms
unresponse
responses stays the same.Correct your spelling
unresponsive
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