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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the
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cement making
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cement-making
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 process, and how
cement
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 is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
Cement
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 production
beginning
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begins
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 from crushing the limestone and clay. From
this
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 stage, the limestone and clay are powder now. Mixed and going to
rotating
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rotate
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. And it's how the limestone and clay becomes
cement
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.
Then
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cement
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 is packed into bags. There are four ingredients for concrete production
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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cement
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 (15%), water (10%), sand (25%) and gravel (50%). These four ingredients
mixing
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are mixed
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on
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in
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concrete
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a concrete
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 mixer. And throughout these
stages
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stages,
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 we get a finished product.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
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