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To graph blow shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

To graph blow shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.
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The graph indicates the percentage of part-time workers in four countries in 1980 and 2010. The initial impression is that about 30
percent
 of workers did part-time
job
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 in 1980 which
it
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had a slight increase to approximately 35
percent
 in 2010 .
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in England almost 25
percent
off
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of
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labors
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 did
part time
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part-time
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 tasks.
Then
 it rose significantly nearly 5
percent
over
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in 2010.
In addition
, roughly 10
percent
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 of Scotlandines
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worked
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 half of the day as their job which
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approximately
had
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doubled in 2010.
Lastly
, in Northern Ireland just over
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15
percent
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 of people had part-time jobs. it decreased marginally well under 15
percent
 in 2010.
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,
although
 most of the countries
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mentioned above, had a considerable ascend over 30 years in the percentage of part-time
labors
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, the percentage of folks who lived in northern Ireland had a partial decline.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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