The firs t chart below shows how energy is used in an average A ustralian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas em issions which result from this energy use. Summarise the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make com parisons where relevant

The firs t chart below shows how energy is used in an average A ustralian

household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas em issions which

result from this energy use.

Summarise the inform ation by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make com parisons where relevant
The pie
graph
depicts the
comparation
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comparison
between how
energy
is used in
average
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the average
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Australian household and
greenhouse
gas
emission
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emissions
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. As we can notice, there is a big difference between the two graphs, which is the percentage of how much
energy
was caused by using heating, with 42% of the total in
average
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the average
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house and only 15% of the total in
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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. There is not a big deal between the
energy
used by water heating, with the number
remain
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remaining
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around 30%. The percentage of refrigeration in
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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is two times more than that in
average
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the average
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house,
were
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apply
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14% and 7%. Another obvious difference we will notice is the cost of other appliances, with 15% in the first
graph
and 28% in the second
graph
, which is nearly two
times’
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times
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growth
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the growth
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. Meanwhile, the
energy
usage of cooling and lighting
remain
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remains
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stable, with the number under 10%. After all, the pie
graph
clearly
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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that
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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has a great influence on reducing the
energy
of heating.
Meanwhile
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the usage of cooling, lighting ,
water
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and water
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heating
remain
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remains
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stable.
However
, the percentage of other appliances and refrigeration
witness
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witnessed
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a
clearly
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rise.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, energy, greenhouse with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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