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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago nad how it looks like now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The presented maps draw a comparative analysis between the structure of the central
library
 20 years ago and its current plan. A broad view of the design shows that in the past, the visitors were mainly provided with the opportunity of
siting
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 around and reading; contrary to the current situation, where the
library
 has the potential to offer a more
various
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 range of activities. Two decades ago, the
library
 could be
devided
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divided
 into three sections
of
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adult
books
,
fiction
 and non-
fiction
,
childrens'
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children's
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books
 and the
digital
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digitally
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 related part where visitors could find CDs and video games. The adult
books
 section occupies the middle part of the
library
 with
fiction
books
 on the
right
 and
non-fictions
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 on the left of the available sitting area.
Right
 above where the
fiction
books
 were organized, was a
room
 for digital products which was next to the
childrens'
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children's
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books
 section. The
enterance
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entrance
 to the
library
 was placed between
reading
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the reading
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room
 and
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk at
bottom
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the bottom
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side
 of the
library
. The present design of the
library
 is relatively
simillar
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similar
 to how it was before with some minor changes in the way different rooms are
utillized
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utilised
. The most eye-catching change lies in the replacement of the enquiry
sesk
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desk
seek
 with a
coffe
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coffee
 place which
appearantly
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apparently
 resulted in removing the central tables and
appearance
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 of
self service
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 machines and
information
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 desk in the adult
fiction
books
 which is now on the
right
side
 of the
library
 placed below the lecture
room
. The left
side
 of the
library
,
on the other hand
, experienced many changes.
Computer
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room
,
right
 under the reference
asile
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aisle
aside
, is placed exactly next to the entrance.
Additinally
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Additionally
,
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the childrens'
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childrens'
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children's
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room
 was moved to the top-left
side
 of the place with added sofas for kids to enjoy storytelling events.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, fiction, right, room, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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