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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates
population
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the population
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 rate of Argentina, Indonesia, Italy,
Korea
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and Korea
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 in 2023 and presents expected ratings for 2025 and 2050.
Overall
, three countries have an increase in 2025 and 2050 except Italy.
Also
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Also,
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 Republic of Korea remains the same in all periods.
In
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At
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 the beginning of
the
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apply
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2003 Argentina had
34
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a 34
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m population. But
this
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these
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 numbers increase gradually,
hence
 in 2025 country
reaches
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will reach
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total
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a total
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 of 48 million and levels up 62 million in 2050. Indonesia showed improvement in 2003 with the highest position
of
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on
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 the chart with 238m. The next year state's civilization
rise
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rose
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 up 36m more than
previous
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the previous
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 year.
Lastly
,
in
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at
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 the end of the
period
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period,
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Indonezia
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Indonesia
reache
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reach
reached
reaches
 to the top of the
scaling
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scale
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 with
total
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a total
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 of 312 million.
On the other hand
, Italy faces
decrease
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a decrease
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 in each year.
As a result
, Italy
takes
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will take
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 a nosedive with almost 10%
till
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by
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 2050.
While
 Korea made 48m in the beginning, it is able to remain constant between 2025 and 2050 with the result of 52 on each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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