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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Contained in the bar chart is data regarding the proportions of three media categories utilized by
individuals
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 across five different
age
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groups
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 to access news regularly within a nation during 2011.
Overall
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, the data indicates that
radio
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 was widely used across all
age
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groups
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, except for
individuals
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 aged 10 to 17. Interestingly, the percentage of
individuals
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 in both the 10-17 and 18-19
age
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 brackets was exactly equal. Regarding social networking, the
usage
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 rate among
individuals
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 in the first two
age
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groups
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 stood at 80%, which was 30% higher than that of
individuals
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 aged 30 to 49 and twice as much as those aged 50-64.
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,
individuals
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 aged 65 and above witnessed the least
usage
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, approximately 25%. Meanwhile, microblogging had the lowest
usage
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 rates, ranging from 10% to around 24% across all
age
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groups
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. Transitioning to
radio
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usage
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, it's evident that adults were frequent users,
whereas
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usage
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 among younger
individuals
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 was comparatively lower. Specifically,
radio
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 was most popular among
individuals
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 aged 18 to 29, with over 90%
usage
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.
This
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 trend was consistent across three other
age
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groups
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: those aged 30-49, 50-64, and 65 and over, with
usage
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 rates approximately around 90%, below 90%, and roughly 85%, respectively.
Conversely
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, the youngest
age
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 group exhibited the lowest
radio
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usage
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, standing precisely at 10%, compared to the other four
groups
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.
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