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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 analytic report provides information pertaining to changes which happened in Central
Library
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 from 20 years ago until the present day.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the public
library
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 has undergone a complete transformation with
room
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 expansions,
as well as
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 all the spaces are repurposed to incorporate new facilities.
Additionally
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, The centre tables and chairs were demolished in order to create an open space. Looking at the left-hand
area
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 of the
library
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, it is evident that the
room
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 which contained CDs, videos and computer games was repurposed into a children's activity
area
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 where now kids can sit on the sofa and enjoy reading fiction
books
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 or join storytelling events.
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, the reading
room
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 which involved newspapers and magazines was replaced with a computer
room
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,
as well as
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 the adult fiction
books
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 areas concerned, it was replaced by all reference
books
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. Moving onto the right-hand side of the Central
Library
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, it can be seen that the children's
books
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area
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 was redeveloped with a lecture
room
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.
Subsequently
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, the adult non-fiction
books
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area
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 was replaced by the adult fiction
books
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,
as well as
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 new facilities were added,
for instance
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, an information desk and self-service machines.
Furthermore
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, the enquiry desk which used to provide tickets or return
books
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, now be replaced with a coffee shop.
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 , in the centre of the
library
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, the tables and chairs were removed to create an open space
area
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, area, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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