people now are live longer than in the past. Some people think that ageing population will cause many problems for government. Other think that have more elderly will benefits for society.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In many nations,
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the life-span
life-span
of Correct your spelling
life span
people
is more
longer than in the past. Some Change the word
apply
people
say there are problems for government
if countries have a dramatic increase in the proportion of Add an article
the government
people
aged 60 over
. Others say if increase in ageing populations, there will have Correct word choice
and over
benefis
. I hold the belief that the drawbacks of Correct your spelling
benefits
this
development are far more significant than the benefits involved.
When people
live longer , several problems can anticipated. First of all
is an Add a comma
all,
increase
demand for Replace the word
increased
heakth
and social care. Correct your spelling
health
In other words
, it ask
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asks
government
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the government
have
to devote a larger budget to Unnecessary verb
apply
healt
care in other to serve the growing demands of an ageing Correct your spelling
health
populaion
. Correct your spelling
population
Hence
, invest
more in healthcare for Wrong verb form
investing
elderly
can put heavy pressure Correct article usage
the elderly
o
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on
government
budgets. As the
result, Correct article usage
a
government
cannot invest in different Add an article
the government
aspect
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aspects
have
benefits for their country. Correct pronoun usage
that have
This
is true in Japan, the investment in healthcare forelderly
quadrupled for Correct your spelling
for elderly
working-age
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the working-age
population
. These thing
may have a bad impact on Change the determiner
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economy
of Add an article
the economy
japan
.
The other drawback is a possible decline in Capitalize word
Japan
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the labor
labor
force with Change the spelling
labour
rapidly
ageing Add an article
a rapidly
the rapidly
population
, there will be fewer people
in the workforce. This
leads to an economy with less storage of qualitied
workers. Correct your spelling
qualified
Hence
, bussiness
may face various consequences Correct your spelling
business
businesses
such
as decrease
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decreased
eficency
, higher labor Correct your spelling
efficiency
cost
and Fix the agreement mistake
costs
enven
reduce competitiveness Correct your spelling
even
i
the Correct your spelling
in
inernational
market.
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international
However
, in reality, ageing
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the ageing
population
can bring advantages such
as give
free Verb problem
apply
experiment
and good training for Fix the agreement mistake
experiments
generation
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the generation
Elderly
live longer so they experience Correct article usage
The elderly
much thing
than young Fix the agreement mistake
many things
people
, that is
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which
mean
some of their knowledge Wrong verb form
means
are
valuable and younger can learn Change the verb form
is
form
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from
this
to avoid some risk
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risks
from
life.
In conclusion, Change preposition
in
disadvantages
of Correct article usage
the disadvantages
rising
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the rising
in
ageing Change preposition
apply
population
is
outweigh their advantages because it Unnecessary verb
apply
put
pressure on Wrong verb form
puts
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the gorvernment
gorvernment
budget and Correct your spelling
government
governments
cause
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causes
lack
of qualitied workers.Correct article usage
a lack
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