Graphs below provide the latest figure about the demographics of the US, including ethnical groups and the population, based on a census that was carried out and administered by US Census Bureau in 2006.
The table map depicts the information about ethnic diversity between 1966 to 2006.
Also
, a combined bar chart illustrates the data about the United States population
growth
spanning over ten decades
.
At one glance, it could be revealed that Hispanic and
Asian and Pacific Correct word choice
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islander
had the highest percentages of raise among all nationalities. Fix the agreement mistake
Islanders
Besides
, there was a dramatically plunged
in Replace the word
dramatic plunge
population
growth
since
1931 to 1940.
Throw the 4 Change preposition
from
decades
, the United States faced with
100 Correct word choice
apply
million
people expanded
. Asian and Pacific islanders were 1.5 Verb problem
apply
million
in 1966 which sharply increased to 14.3 million
in 2006. The Hispanic population
were 8.5 million
in 1966 and their growth
was five times more and became 44.7. Other ethnical groups such
as white, black and others picked up slightly over the decades
. In population
Correct article usage
the population
growth
chart, after a minimal climbed
and Replace the word
climb
fell
over three Wrong verb form
fall
decades
, a significantly crashed
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significant crash
in
1931 to 1940 led the United States Change preposition
from
population
decreased
to 8 Change the verb form
to decrease
million
people. The
next decade Change preposition
In the
U.S
experienced a Correct your spelling
it
quickly jumped
to twenty Replace the word
quick jump
million
people. Althouth
Correct your spelling
Although this
This
number even raised up to twenty-seven million
in 1951-60, but, the next three decades
witnessed slowly number of population
decrease since 1990.
To sum up
, the U.S
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U.S.
population
continued to rise more and more even with a shockingly
loss in 1931-40. A notable data was that the white peers were the most numbers in comparison to all other Change the adverb
shocking
ethnicals
.Correct your spelling
ethnicities
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, growth, decades, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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