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The chart below shows the total number of hours per month from 1980 to 2015 that people in the USA used modern technology divided into four categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of hours per month from 1980 to 2015 that people in the USA used modern technology divided into four categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph chart depicts the
the
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average trip distance per
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miles
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mile
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 among the United States kids aged 5 to 15 years old, illustrating how
miles
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 they were passed by multiple methods. At one glance, it could be revealed that
attempt
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attempting
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 to
trip
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travel
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with
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by
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bus
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the bus
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 was the
favourate
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favourite
 way to in the U.S
whereas
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, walking was the least selective choice. From 1970 until 2020 ,
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bus
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the bus
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 was the best
periority
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priority
to traveled
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for traveling
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 children. In 1970, children went by
bus
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about
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for about
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average
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an average
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28
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of 28
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miles
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. The numbers were not
fell
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fallen
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 over the decades and still
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bus
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buses
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 had
the
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a
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 peak point in 2020.
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 cycling was the same number as the
bus
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 average in 1970, it declined
under
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to under
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 20
miles
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 in 2020. The
least
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last
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 item
on
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in
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 1970 by under 7
miles
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 was
taxi
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a taxi
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 was shockingly rocketed to 20
miles
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 in 2020.
Overall
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, children were chosen vehicle items to
went
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go
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 to their destination more than items which need to be motivated and burnt energy.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern technology
  • significant increase
  • notable milestone
  • growth rate
  • usage patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • exponential growth
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • trend
  • data analysis
  • overall trend
  • compared to
  • demonstrate
  • illustrate
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