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The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data presents the quantity of
tea
 and
coffee
 that were imported by Canada,
US
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the US
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,
UK
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the UK
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, and
Germany
 in the year 2007.
UK
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The UK
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 had
he
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the
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 highest amount
on importing
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of imported
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tea
amounted
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amounting
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 to 80,000
tonnes
, followed by
Germany
that
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which
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 shipped
in
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apply
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40,000
tonnes
. Meanwhile, Canada and
US
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the US
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 imported 20,000
tonnes
 of
tea
.
Coffee
 shipped in by
Germany
 amounted to 50,000
tonnes
.
On the other hand
,
UK
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the UK
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 only bought
in
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apply
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30,000
tonnes
 of
coffee
. Canada and
US
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the US
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also
 had the same quantity
on importing
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of imported
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coffee
 amounted to approximately 40,000
tones
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tonnes
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. In conclusion,
UK
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the UK
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 was the top country that bought
in
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apply
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tea
 but the lowest at importing
coffee
.
While
,
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Germany
 was the top country that shipped in
coffee
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, uk, germany, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import/export
  • commodity
  • metric tons
  • comparative
  • trend
  • data
  • statistics
  • significant
  • notable
  • figure
  • country-specific
  • bulk
  • graph/chart
  • depict
  • illustrate
  • fluctuate
  • dominant
  • minor
  • contrast
  • analyze
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