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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some
people
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 opine that developed
countries
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 should not import proficient
workers
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 from underdeveloped or developing
countries
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 because the poor nations will have a scarcity of skilled employees. I, personally disagree with the given statement as migration leads to
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in
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to
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economic
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the economic
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 sector
as well as
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job
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the job
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 sector. In the following paragraphs, I intend to discuss my opinion about
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 issue.
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 with, nowadays, a lot of skilled
workers
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 are moving towards affluent
countries
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due to
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 having a luxurious life and
increase
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 their earnings. I believe
,
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 it helps
people
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rise
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raise
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 their standard of living. As migrated
workers
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 provide money to their families, it helps to contribute to their
countrys'
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country's
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 economy.
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: in 2023,Bangladesh
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earned 30% more than
2022
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in 2022
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 from
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the remittence
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remittence
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remittance
 sector
due to
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a
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an
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 escalating number of
migration
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migrants
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.
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,
people
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 of non-solvent
countries
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 are working hard to increase their skills which results in
development
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the development
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 of
education
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an education
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 system. At present, citizens are concerned about gaining knowledge of particular sectors
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in where
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where
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which
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 they are interested
in
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.
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, governments are
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 taking initiatives to improve their education level so that
people
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 can compete
in
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abroad. To illustrate, in 2024,
government
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the government
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 of Bangladesh has given free training facilities
for encouraging
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to encourage
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 the young generation to level up their skills.
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,
Education
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the Education
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 Board has added practical
assignment
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assignments
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 so that students can improve their knowledge.
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, I strongly believe that developed
countries
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 can
also
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be benefitted
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 from
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. They can get skilled
workers
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 at lower prices.
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this
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, when a skilled person
go
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 to
sovent
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some
countries
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, he
also
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 tries hard to contribute to the economy of that country. Rich nations can get
advantage
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an advantage
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 from their creativities and innovations.
To sum up
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, rich
countries
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 should take more employees so that both
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nation
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nations
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 can get benefits from
this
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.
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task achievement
To improve further, work on ensuring your main points are more comprehensively developed and supported with thorough arguments and additional detailed examples.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to some small grammar and sentence structure errors. They don't majorly affect understanding, but refining them will make your writing more polished.
introduction
The introduction clearly states your position, setting the stage for your arguments.
examples
You have included relevant and specific examples to support your points, such as discussing Bangladesh's remittance sector.
logical structure
The essay has a logical structure with clear paragraphs dedicated to different points of argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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