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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the Unitedv Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the Unitedv Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives information about the middle
corbon
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carbon
 dioxide emissions per
people
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person
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 in the UK ,
Swand
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Switzerland
 Italy and Portugal the during
of
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period from 1967 to 2007.
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, the graph shows four countries in
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Europe
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 which the significant number was in the UK
in contrast
 the lowest rate of carbon dioxide emissions was in
Partugal
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Portugal
. First of all, the figure
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 Portugal
was
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increased dramatically from 1967 to 1987
which it
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reach
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to
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four
tonne
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 after that in
one decade
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 growth rapidly to reach
to
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peak
numbers
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around
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 6
tonne
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then
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remained
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stood
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at the same number exactly.
The
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Sweden's trend
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 to highest point in 1977
subsequently
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dropped sharply.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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