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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map illustrates the changes
of
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 an
airport
 at the present moment and how it will be in the next year.
Overall
, what stands out from the picture is that the southwest part of the
airport
 will experience
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significant development. In order to expand the area, a great number of facilities will be provided for the
airport
. First of all, people will have access to two
departures’
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 entrances
as well as
 two
arrivals’
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ones
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,
while
 there
are
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 only one of each in the
airport
 at the present time. If we look at the security passport control,
check-in
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the check-in
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 station will be transferred to the north-east part of the section and replaced by the bag drop station.
In addition
, on the left hand of the
departures
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 a café will be located. Regarding
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passport control customs, changing the architecture of the building and creating a new space where cars can be hired by people is another purpose of the redeveloping project.
Moreover
, an ATM will be constructed just on the south part of the new café. What is noticeable, is the transformation of gates which will increase from 8 gates to 18 gates in the next year. Apart from that,
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walkway
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 which is available to individuals will be demolished and make
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way
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 sky trains in the future.
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Task Achievement
Your task achievement is quite strong, with a clear understanding of the main changes in the airport redevelopment. However, ensure that all key features are mentioned and described with specific examples where applicable. For instance, the mention of retail shops or waiting lounges could add depth to your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your coherence and cohesion are good, with a logical structure that helps the reader understand the redevelopment. However, the conclusion can be slightly more comprehensive to encapsulate the major changes. Also, work on making smoother transitions between points to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
You successfully highlighted the major developments, such as the increase in gates and the addition of new facilities like an ATM and café. This shows good comprehension of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your logical structure is clear, moving from an overview to specific details and comparisons. This makes your essay easy to follow.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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