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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say where you think you left the papers •Explain why they are so important •Tell the manager what you want him /her to do

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Dear manager I am
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writing
writting
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writing
this
 letter with regard to inform you that you have left your
paper
 in the hotel when we were
have had
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having
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 meetings
i
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I
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leave
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left
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 the room i
have
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foud
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found
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 some
paper
that is
 very important
i
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think i i took it.
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i
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I
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 brought
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it to
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to
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it to
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 my hotel
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for
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to
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save
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in
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two
weeeks
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weeks
 ago you
have leaved
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left
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paper
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small
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a small
the small
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 room and
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there
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is
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are
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contain
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contained
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paper
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the paper
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 and when
i
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see
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saw
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 it many results
involve
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involved
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this
paper
.
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type
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 of
thing
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 important in
this
paper
.
also
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of
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manager
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managers
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 looking for
this
paper
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i
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 cannot believe
for
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it will be lost
for
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this
 week
i
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 think you should stay for
moment
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 in the lobby for
wating
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waiting
 me in order
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for i
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i
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I
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 can give you
this
paper
 because you
have
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really
need
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needed
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 it.
Then
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for
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about
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 who is bring for your
that
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paper
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for they
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they
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 can keep
this
 carefully.
Threfore
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Therefore
you
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 job can be run as
good
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posibable
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possible
 for next time. I am
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writing
wrriting
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this
 letter to look forward to
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hearing
heraing
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hearing
 from you soon your
sicerelly
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sincerely
abi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the greeting and closing match the level of formality required by the task. Instead of starting directly with 'Dear manager,' consider beginning with 'Dear [Hotel Name] Manager,' and closing with 'Yours sincerely' instead of 'your sicerelly'.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should contain a single, clear idea. For example, describe where you think you left the papers in one paragraph and explain their importance in a separate one.
task achievement
Proofread your letter to correct grammatical errors and ensure clarity. For instance, phrases like 'i leave the room' should be corrected to 'I left the room,' and 'i have foud' to 'I have found.'
task achievement
Make sure your response fully answers all parts of the task. Clearly explain the importance of the papers, where you left them, and what you need the manager to do.
task achievement
The letter identifies a specific problem and attempts to solve it by seeking assistance from the hotel manager.
task achievement
The writer shows that they understand the importance of the papers and explains this to the manager, which helps convey the seriousness of the situation.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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