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The map shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The map shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
#plan #library #summarise #information #features #comparisons
Contained in the floorplans is information pertaining to the comparison of
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the library'
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library'
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s
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 ground floor between 2001 and 2009.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
books
sectors
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sector
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 has been reconstructed in order to leave spaces for new genres,
while
 technological amenities have
been
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replaced the news area.
Additionally
, despite various changes not only
the
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 location of
books
, but
also
the
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 technological facilities, the span of the building remained
no changed
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. Looking at the book sectors where there was an alteration not only the additional
books
, but they were
also
 relocated. To the west, in 2001 where it used to have only self-help in conjunction with history
books
,
however
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 in 2009, the social science
along with
households
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books
 were included
into
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in
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 the bookshelf. To the north, the children part has replaced the old fiction
books
. Turning to the remaining area
with
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the separated tables being merged into rows in the
center
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 of the building
while
 the newspaper and periodical shelves have been transformed into the media sector with new computers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-service machines
  • computer stations
  • digital resources
  • book sections
  • fiction, non-fiction, reference
  • café area
  • repositioned
  • user preferences
  • management strategies
  • children's area
  • youth engagement
  • educational activities
  • meeting rooms
  • collaborative spaces
  • community events
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