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The bar charts show the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The bar charts show the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The diagram
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 the amount of people who consumed five portions of vegetables and fruits each day in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008. The unit
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is measure
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measure
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 in percentage.
Overall
 it can be seen that
,
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apply
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a woman
the woman
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woman
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women
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 from 2001 to 2008 always
keep
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kept
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 the highest percentage,
whitls
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with
 children at the lowest but it got an increase from these years.
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 man
also
get
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 increased
from
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between
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 2001 and 2008. Starting with
woman
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women
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 that ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day, it
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began
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 at a quarter in 2001 and
reach
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reached
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 a peak at around 34% in 2006 before it dropped slightly to nearly 30% in 2008. Turning to the remaining dynamic, below
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the woman
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woman
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women
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 stage was
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a man
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man
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men
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 which
keep
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apply
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remain
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remained
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 at approximately 17% between 2001 and 2003. After
that
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 it rose significantly to 26% in 2007 and declined slowly to 25% in 2008.
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 was
children
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the children
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groups
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group
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it
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which
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begin
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began
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 at 13%
increased
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and increased
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 rapidly to around 25% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Portions
  • Consumption
  • Demographic breakdown
  • Public health
  • Trend
  • Bar chart
  • Notable peaks and falls
  • Implications
  • Public awareness
  • Health outcomes
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