The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the comparison of
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qualification
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in Australia and the percentages of
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and
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who held them in 1999. As
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by the chart, the proportion of skilled vocational
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by males
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the highest. Meanwhile , more the number of females than
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for the Undergraduate
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diplomas
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for 90%
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lower for females at 10%.
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,
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twice as high as
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35
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% ,
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’ figure is 70%.For Bachelor’s Degree ,
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more popular than males with
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respectively 50%,
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%. The data
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Postgraduate
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Diploma
, males were considerably higher compared to
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70%,
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30%. By
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,
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Master
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than
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with data respectively 40%, 60%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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