The provided three circular diagrams depict the percentages of individuals pursuing different academic fields – Computer Science, Medicine, Law, and Business – in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

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The pie charts compare the ratio of majors pursued by students in the National University over three decades, which are 1990, 2000, and 2010. The degrees include

Computer

Science

, Medicine,

Law

, and

Business

Overall

Computer

Science

was the most favourable major over the period.

In contrast

Law

had the lowest number of graduates.

Moreover

, the

Computer

Science

portion steeply increased,

whereas

Business

constantly went down. In 1990,

Computer

Science

and

Business

majors equally produced the most students with 30% of the population, followed by Medicine at 25%.

However

, when it comes to

Law

, it had the lowest proportion at 15%. Moving to the other periods,

Computer

Science

's popularity rose from 40% in 2000 to 45% in 2010, remains the highest fraction. Meanwhile,

Business

showed a constant decrease trend until it hit 15% in the latest period. Medicine went up to 30% in 2000, but it declined to 25% in 2010.

Lastly

, the

Law

major stayed at 15% in the final period.

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