With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent
time
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times
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, fast
food
has become
quiet
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famous amongst
the
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society as a larger number of
population
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the population
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shift
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to eating processed
food
for breakfast, lunch and dinner. I
would
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be explicating the merits and demerits of
this
notion
along with
valid reasons and illustrations that lean mostly towards the drawbacks. On the one hand, grabbing a burger or a sandwich on the way to work or school in the rush hours of
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mornings
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morning
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, conveniently suits
a
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lifestyle of an individual in
this
busy world. To elaborate, a study by a Youtuber delineated that the time taken to prepare a
home cooked
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meal is significantly higher than buying breakfast from a fast
food
chain.
Therefore
, the convenience factor of preferring
McDonalds
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Mcdonald's
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or KFC
instead
of cooking at home is certainly a plus point.
Moreover
, since junk
food
does not require the purchase of fresh produce on a daily basis, they have the liberty to sell their products at cheaper and attractive price points.
Thus
, more and more people turn towards fast foods because grocery shopping and preparing meals
is
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comparatively expensive.
On the other hand
, breakfast is eaten like a king’s meal which means the first meal of the day should contain all necessary nutrients. Having said that, the processed
food
industry produces in bulk and
freeze
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the
food
items until sold by adding preservatives and
food
colorings
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.
Subsequently
, the meals consumed
from
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these
food
industries carry negligible amounts of nutrients
as well as
high amounts of harmful chemicals which result in health issues.
For example
, a scientific journal published that a substance called phosphate additives present in beef patties in an established fast
food
chain is one of the main causes of stomach cancer.
Furthermore
,
countries
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in countries
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like
USA
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the USA
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, where junk
food
consumption is high,
prevalence
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the prevalence
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of obesity is skyrocketing.
Thus
, when the health of citizens in a nation is compromised, the future of that country is inevitably in danger.
To conclude
, the
long term
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effects on health conditions
consequently
effecting
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the whole population
is
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not worth the cost and
time effective
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facets of opting for processed meals.
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