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In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they do. Why do you think this is? What can be done to change this?

#countries #people #rubbish #change
Recycling used to be a new technology 30 years ago, since
then
, it has become a necessity for our environment. Recycling is quite important because ignoring it over the
upcoing
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upcoming
 years will
effect
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affect
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 not just our future, but the future of the next generation. I
beleive
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believe
 that the reasons in general depend on three different points; government policy, culture, and economic effect. Maximising all three points could lead to better recycling all over the
world
. Governments all over the
world
 have varying policies for their environmental goals. Not having support for clean energy might lead to less money to recycle rubbish.
Also
, not having punishment could cause
people
 not to
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 the right choice. Culture is another reason that recycling is not a popular behaviour. In some
countries
, it may not be a cool thing to do,
espically
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especially
 with teenagers.
People
 could be blinded by misinformation about recycling. Social media can be used to tell
people
 about the benefits of saving our
world
. Economic ability might affect how each country
have
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 resources. Not
enough
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 resources means not being able to reuse different materials. Poor
countries
 cannot recycle as much as the rich
countries
. Not having taxes will cause
people
 to recycle less. Supporting each other
increase
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 the rate of recycling worldwide. In conclusion. Recycling is an essential part of our life nowadays. Improving
the
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government policies,
and
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apply
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telling
people
 about the
benefit
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benefits
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 of clean energy, and supporting other poor
countries
 will cause better results for
every one
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in the
world
.
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