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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….,

#mrs #barrett #woman #lives #town #someone #home #hours #summer #work
Dear modem, I am writing
this
 letter with regard that
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 will help you about you chore in your hose for a few house
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 would like you to do two
somthing
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something
 in your
home
,
fisrt
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first
 is you can stay
in
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at
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 my house for minutes and you can leave your
home
 for a moment or stay in
hotel
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.
This
 is because
of
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your place will clean up all from your living
rooms
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untill
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until
you
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your
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kithchen
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kitchen
.
Also
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 it is
verry
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very
 dirty when
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 come
in
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into your
home
. Two weeks ago the owner of your
home
have
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asked me
for doing
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to do
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 it,
from
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to
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sweep
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 your garden,yard and all of your
place
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places
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.
Moreover
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this
 house was
leaving
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 for
long
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 time and it was
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very
verry
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very
 inconvenient for living a long term,and many of trash that
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 will through to the
rubbishbox
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rubbish box
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 will be able
do
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to do
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this
for
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this
 time
due to
 my job was finished
last
 time and
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fell
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feel
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 free
know
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now
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,but if you will ask me in
afternoon
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 might i have
extra
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an extra
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 job
froom
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from
 my boss so
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prefer
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prefer to
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 do
this
in
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this
 morning.
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know
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i
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 have many friends
for
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who for
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 help me to do
this
,so do not worry about it. Thank you so much for your attention in advance, I look forward to hearing from you too soon Your
sicerely
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sincerely
abi
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greeting and closing
Ensure to address the recipient correctly in the greeting. In this case, use 'Dear Mrs Barrett,' instead of 'Dear modem,'.
complete response
Check spelling and grammar thoroughly. For instance, 'house' instead of 'hose' and 'hours' instead of 'house'.
logical structure
Make your sentences clear and precise. Avoid unnecessary repetition and elaborate on your points more coherently.
logical structure
Use separate paragraphs for each of the main points you are addressing to improve clarity and cohesion.
suitable writing tone
Adopt a more formal tone to match the conventional style of a letter applying for a job or work opportunity. For instance, avoid phrases like 'Thank you so much'. Instead, you could say, 'Thank you for considering my application.'
complete response
You've attempted to cover all the points mentioned in the prompt - how you can help, why you want to do the work, and your availability.
greeting and closing
You've used a polite closing which is important in such letters.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
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  • Prior commitments
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