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The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about how many employees who absent because of sickness between 1991 and 2001.
Overall
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, there was an increase in the proportion of
people
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 who have days off
due to
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 illness in the
Netherlands
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, Sweden and the UK, with the figure for the
Netherlands
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 being generally highest, except for 1991.
In addition
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, Germany had the lowest of
people
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 who were absent because of
this
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 reason, and the data of
this
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 country was
also
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 converse with the UK throughout the period. Looking first at the rise areas, at the beginning of the time frame, the share of
people
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 with illness absence in the
Netherlands
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 was smaller than in
France
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, at 4,9%. After that, it surpassed
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 nation to grow to 5,5% in the next year, before falling strongly to just over 4% in 1996 and bouncing to a peak of 5,5%
at the end
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 of the period. A similar change, but to a lesser extent, was seen in Sweden with the figure starting at exactly 3% and hovering at
this
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 number in the next 5 years. From 1996 onwards, it surpassed
France
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 to gain second status and increased significantly to 4,5% in 2001. A rise, but negligible, was
also
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 seen in the percentage of employees who had days off because of sickness in the UK, with the cycle of the fluctuation that hovered around 2% being repeated according SIN diagram. Turning to the remaining areas,
France
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 had the highest figure at the beginning of the period.
Although
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this
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 proportion was maintained in the next year,
France
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 still was surpassed by the
Netherlands
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 to get the second position. From that point onwards, the share of
people
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 with illness absence in
this
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 country dropped sharply, even
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 was lower than in Sweden in 1996. It kept the third position throughout the remaining stage and reached a trough of exactly 3% in 2001.
Conversely
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, the data in Germany was quite steady, hovering 2% from 1991 to 2001.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, netherlands, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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