The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table illustrates numeral information about how much
people
of different employments enjoy their free time.
Overall
,
it is clear that
retired and unemployed
men
and women have the highest number in
this
chart.
Besides
, there is no
bar
for
men
in part-time employed and housewives section which means there is no enjoyment figure.
To begin
, for full-time employed
people
, the first section out of 5 sections, male and female figures are around 42 and 38.
Moreover
, unemployed
people
's numbers are 83 for
men
and 78 for women. Retired
people
also
have the same number and it is 83 for males and 78 for females.
Furthermore
, part-time employed women are exactly 40 and as we can see there is no
bar
for
men
in
this
part.
finally
,
according to
the provided
bar
chart housewives figure for girls is exactly 50 and there is not a
bar
for
men
either.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time employment
  • part-time employment
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • housewives
  • gender comparison
  • notable differences
  • allocate time
  • trend analysis
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • societal norms
  • economic factors
  • gender-specific trends
  • employment transition
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