The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented graph draws a diachronic analysis of
urbanization
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rate among four Asian countries: Malaysia,
Thailand
, the Phillippines, and
Indonesia
(1970-2040)
along with
a projection of the upcoming 20 years which generally expects
Malayisa
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Malaysia
to be the regional leader.
Overall
, the upward trend of
of
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urbanization is shared between all four nations. An in-depth examination of the predicted leaders, Malaysia and
Indonesia
,
reveal
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that the latter experienced a more dramatic growth starting from a low of under 10% in 1970, surpassing both
Thailand
(2000) and
Indonesia
(2010), reaching a secure 50% in 2020. Malaysia,
in contrast
, illustrated a
three-decead
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three-decade
long fluctuation reaching 40% in 1990. Henceforth, it steadily grew to 70% in 2020 which is expected to rise to 85%, granting a 25% lead over
Indonesia
.
While
exhibiting a slower pace,
Thailand
and the Phillippines
also
illustrate a rise in their urban population.
Thailand
,
for instance
, began its journey at under 20% and increased to 30% in 1990; since
then
it held an almost unchanged figure.
However
, a more
propnounced
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rise to 45% is predicted for
this
nation. The Phillippines,
conversly
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conversely
, commenced with summiting to 50% in 1990 and falling back to 40% in 2010; which was the starting point of its undisturbed increase to
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anticipated 50% in 2040.
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