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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female who did various free-time activities in England

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female who did various free-time activities in England
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The chart depicts the proportion of individuals of both genders who did diversified spare time activities in England. The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of people who used the internet were male,
whereas
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, the opposite was true for females.
Additionally
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,
men
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 and
women
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 have the same
percentage
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in
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 watching TV, spending time with family, doing sports and reading. Examining for
further
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 detail, regarding watching TV, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 was over 75%, which was lower than
men
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 by 2%. The proportion of both
men
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 and
women
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 watching television was similar to spending time with family category.
Moreover
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, the proportion of
men
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 doing exercise was 75%, which was higher than
women
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, by 4%. There was a similarity in the ratio of doing sport and reading by both genders. Turning back to the remaining statistics, there were two large disparities between
men
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 and
women
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 in shopping and using the Internet. Regarding shopping, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 was about 75%, which is significantly higher than
men
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 by over 45%.
In contrast
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, the ratio of
women
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 using the internet was approximately 40%, which is lower than
men
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 over 30%.
Furthermore
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,
men
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 had a higher rate of
women
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 playing computer games, by 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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