The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the town of Barmouth before and after proposed new changes to stop cars entering the old town.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar shart shows the huge development between 1936 until 2007 and the impressive new places in the area.
To begin
with,the centre of Barmouth
town
has witnessed more organised pathway surrounded with shops like post office, big supermarket and shopping centre it's not that huge difference but it's more organised and clearer.on the right side of the river it become a residential area and the river become in the middle of the area.
On the other hand
, the museum has become an government building and the land form turned into a golf course. It's a huge development since 1936 with a great result of the organisation for Barmoth
town
. In conclusion,we could see it had become of more a modren
town
who mixed there history and culture with the modren life to give a better quality of living in
this
town
and more development than the previous years to match the any kind of generation.
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