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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line illustrates the
visitors
 who go to the British
Museum
,the Science
Musseum
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Museum
,and the Nature History
Museum
 from June to September
in
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apply
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2003. The British
Museum
 has the most
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
 in the whole
summer time
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summertime
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 and September. The highest amount of
visitors
 is in July
that
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when
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 visitor numbers are up to 750,000. The Science
Museum
 is
on
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in
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 the middle amounts of
visitors
 in the line graph,which starts
gustes
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gusts
 from 550,00 and declines to 390,000 in July.In the
autum
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autumn
, the number
increase
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increased
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 slightly to 490,000. The lowest number of
visitors
in
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to
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these three London
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this three London museum
these three London museums
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museum
 is the Nature History
Museum
. The
numbers
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number
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 who visit
this
museum
starts
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start
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 from 400,000 in June and later little
slidly
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solidly
 descend to 300,000 in August;
however
,the
passengers
Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
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 go up to 450,000 in September.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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