The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
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The
salmon
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life cycle is depicted in the diagram below, which belongs to a group of huge
fish
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.
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, it is a straightforward cynical process with the baby
fish
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born in the
river
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and feeding on the water plants there before moving to the sea when it is fully grown up, which
then
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moves back to the
river
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to start a new cycle.
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, the length of
salmon
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increases significantly throughout its life.
Initially
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,
salmon
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eggs are laid on mini-sized rocks surrounded by reeds in order for fries to reach
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the available foods
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to ensure a slight flow of the
river
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which is needed for the newborns to survive.
After
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this
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5 or 6-month period, the
fish
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starts to move to the lower part of rivers where it lives there for about 4 years in a quick-moving environment. Meanwhile, the size of the
fish
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will grow until it reaches a maximum of 15 cm in
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stage and is going to be called a smolt.
Subsequently
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, these smolts will migrate to the ocean to spend the next 5 years of their life and be declared adult
salmon
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that can be over 70 cm long.
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, at breeding seasons the
fish
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has to go back to the upper
river
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so as to lay eggs safely and begin another cycle.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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