The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant
The
salmon
life cycle is depicted in the diagram below, which belongs to a group of huge
fish
.
Overall
, it is a straightforward cynical process with the baby
fish
born in the
river
and feeding on the water plants there before moving to the sea when it is fully grown up, which
then
moves back to the
river
to start a new cycle.
Additionally
, the length of
salmon
increases significantly throughout its life.
Initially
,
salmon
eggs are laid on mini-sized rocks surrounded by reeds in order for fries to reach
to
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the available foods
as well as
to ensure a slight flow of the
river
which is needed for the newborns to survive.
After
this
5 or 6-month period, the
fish
starts to move to the lower part of rivers where it lives there for about 4 years in a quick-moving environment. Meanwhile, the size of the
fish
will grow until it reaches a maximum of 15 cm in
this
stage and is going to be called a smolt.
Subsequently
, these smolts will migrate to the ocean to spend the next 5 years of their life and be declared adult
salmon
that can be over 70 cm long.
Finally
, at breeding seasons the
fish
has to go back to the upper
river
so as to lay eggs safely and begin another cycle.
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