The line graph shows the percentage of renewable energy generation over total energy produced in 6 countries from 2010 to 2013.

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The chart illustrates how much electricity in six countries was produced from renewable

sources

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between 2010 and 2013.

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, there was an increase in the percentage of energy production coming from renewable

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in all six countries examined, with the most dramatic rise being seen in Germany.

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, Germany had the highest figures from

mid 2010

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onwards. The percentage of energy generated from renewable

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in the USA started at about 19%, after which it saw a decline to reach a low of around 13%, before increasing to just over 20% in 2012 and 2013. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for India, declining from approximately 17% to 16%

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after the first year and recovering back to its initial figure in 2010. About 17% of the USA's electricity production came from renewable

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of energy, with a subsequent considerable rise

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% in 2013. The figures for Spain, France and China saw smaller rises of about 2%, ending at just over 15%, 15%, and 12.5% respectively.

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The line graph shows the percentage of renewable energy generation over total energy produced in 6 countries from 2010 to 2013.

It is a common aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work for an employer. Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweigh the drawbacks?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You should spend about 40 mins. Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of a person’s life. How far do you agree with this view?