People think teenage years are the happiest time of their lives while others argue that adult life is the happiest despite greater responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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years are the happiest period of their lives ,
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others think that adult time is the happiest despite responsibility all around.
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rather than teenage years.
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You need to clearly state your thesis in the introduction. Specify whether you agree or disagree with the statement to provide a clear direction for your essay.
coherence cohesion
Avoid using run-on sentences and ensure proper punctuation to maintain clarity and readability.
task achievement
Each point you make should be developed with detailed explanations and examples to support your argument. As it stands, the essay lacks depth and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Include a concluding sentence or a paragraph that summarises your overall argument and reinforces your thesis.
coherence cohesion
Organise your essay into clear paragraphs. Each main point should be addressed in a separate paragraph to ensure logical flow and coherence.
task achievement
The topic is clearly understood and you have presented a relevant argument.
coherence cohesion
The use of transition words like 'To begin with' helps signal the introduction of a new point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • nostalgia
  • autonomy
  • peer pressure
  • accomplishment
  • maturity
  • stability
  • fulfillment
  • life stages
  • well-being
  • optimism
  • pessimism
  • hormonal changes
  • identity
  • financial responsibility
  • work-life balance
  • nostalgic
  • evolution of happiness
  • remembrance
  • milestones
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