The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.
The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of the
population
living in urban areas in the whole
world
and in different parts of the
world
. To commence with, the graph shows a detailed report of how much
population
is staying in
world
the first and foremost is the
africa
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in
year
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1950 i is lacking about 15
percent
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while
in the
year
2015, it increased to 37
percent
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and
then
drastically increased to 51 per cent in the coming era 2050. Moving on to
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Asia it was approximately 17
percent
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in 1950 and 41
percent
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in 2015 and suddenly increased to 53
percent
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.
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in
Europe
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Europe,
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the
population
was seen more as compared to Africa and Asia it was around 51
percent
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in 1950 and 72
percent
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in 2015
while
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78
percent
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in 2050.
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the
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latin
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America
had 42% of
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population
in the
year
1950
while
in 2015 it was
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78%
while
more increased in 2050 which was 84%.
Moreover
in North
America
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, it was seen that 64% was in the
year
1950
while
79% in 2015 and drastically increased to 87% in 2050.
Furthermore
, the
world
had the least
population
in urban areas in 1950 it was 29%
while
49% in 2015 and
then
60% in 2050.
To sum up
, The lowest
population
was crystal clearly observed in the
world
and more
population
was observed in North
America
America
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • regions
  • trends
  • global
  • increase/decrease
  • patterns
  • compare/contrast
  • noteworthy
  • industrialization
  • economic factors
  • migration
  • government policies
  • bar chart illustrates
  • overall trend
  • noticeable
  • particularly
  • summarize
  • highlight
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