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The chart below shows the book sales for five different types of fiction books from 2006 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the book sales for five different types of fiction books from 2006 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the
book
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sales
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 for five different types of
fiction
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books
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 from the
year
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2006-to
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2006 to
 2010 . To commence with, The young
adult
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 gross
earnings
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 in the
year
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 2006 was around 30
billion
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while
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 moving on to
classics
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 it was less
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then
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 19
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While
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 the
mystery
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fiction
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book
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 had more
sales
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earnings
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 of approximately 60
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 and Rommance had a slightly more demand of around 83
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 .The lowest earning was for sci-fi and
fantasy
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 having just only 19
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earnings
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.
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 in the
year
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 2007, both young
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 and
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classics
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books
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 were earning 30
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while
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mystery
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 had 80
billion
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 .
Romance
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 had more
earnings
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 which was around 119
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 which was double as compared to other
fiction
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books
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 and the least was again sci-fi and
fantasy
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 20
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. Moving on to the
year
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 2008 the least was again young adults and
classics
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 and more was agin the
mystery
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 which was at 57
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while
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romance
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 was again 89
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sales
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 earning the least was again the sci-fi and
fantasy
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 which was again at 17
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 .
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 , in the
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 2009, young
adult
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 and
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classics
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classic books
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book
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 were at the same earning point and more was
mystery
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 and the again highest was
romance
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 which was at 79
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 and
then
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 comes the sci-fi-
fantasy
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 which was at 9
billion
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.
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, in the
year
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 2010, the young
adult
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 gross
earnings
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 were 25
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 and
classics
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 were less than 6
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then
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a
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sudden gross
earnings
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 seen for
mystery
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while
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romance
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fictionbook
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fiction book
 were 89
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 and the least was sci-fi and
fantasywas
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fantasy was
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.
To sum up
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, the more
sales
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 of
a
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romance
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fiction
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book
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books
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 were seen more and least were sci-fi and
fantasy
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 and the rest
fiction
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books
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 were
last
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 sold .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words book, sales, fiction, books, year, adult, earnings, billion, classics, mystery, fantasy, romance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales trend
  • comparison
  • sales figures
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • spike in sales
  • drop in sales
  • contributing factors
  • popularity
  • societal trends
  • cultural trends
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