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The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given image illustrates the
process
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 of making drinking
water
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 by solar power.
Overall
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, the
process
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 commences with gaining heat from the sun and culminating with the clean
water
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 ready to be used. The first half of the
process
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 is pumping the
water
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 out of the underground.
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, the solar energy from the sun is absorbed by a solar panel,
then
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this
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 energy is transported to the converter and changed to electricity.
Next,
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this
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 electricity is being used by a pump to pump the
water
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 from an underground well. The remaining half of the
process
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 is transported to the reservoir. After the
water
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 is pumped through the pipe, it is
reserved
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stored
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 in a
water
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 tank.
Then
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,
this
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water
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 can be obtained by using a
water
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 tap and a container.
Finally
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,
this
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water
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 can be drunk directly or used in different ways depending on the user's demand.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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