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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet everday from 2003-2006.

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different ages in the UK who used the Internet everday from 2003-2006.
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The given diagram consists
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 about the proportion of mature people by
group
age
 accessing the Internet between 2003 and 2006.
Overall
, it is observed that the rates of people using
this
 platform in 2005 and 2006 were higher than those in 2003 and 2004, with the exception of
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group
 between 16-24 and 55-64.
Additionally
,
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users
 in 2003 were recorded in the
age
 above 65. Starting off with the figure
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 the
age
 25 to 44, about 50%
users
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 were recorded in 2003, as the
year
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 passed, the proportion witnessed a steady increase throughout the
years
 and
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ended
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 up at 80% in 2006. A similar trend was seen in the 45 to 54 category, the figure started off at 60% and
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surged
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 substantially for a straight of 3
years
, which culminated with
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 as the
age
 25-to-34. Turning to the 55-64 sector, the
users
 in 2003 were as halve as the
age
 between 45 to 54, a moderate upward was seen in 2006, culminating at 50%. Moving onto
group
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ages
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 ranging from 16 to 24
years
 old, between the
year
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years
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 2003 and 2004, 80% of
users
 had remained the same before experiencing a substantial increase to exactly 100%. By the
year
 2006, 10%
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users
 were seen, illustrating a slight downfall in usage. Regarding the
group
 above 65, more
users
 were measured in 2003. By a sequence
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next
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 3
years
, about 10% and 17% accounted for the
year
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years
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2004 and 2006 before
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 an increase to a precise 20% in the final
year
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group, age, users, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantially" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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