The table below shows the percentage of the population who ride bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.

The table below shows the percentage of the population who ride bicycles in one town by age group in 2012.
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The table provides information about the proportions of two genders who engaged in riding bicycles in a specific town by
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bracket during the year 2012.
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it is clear that
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females spend more time riding bikes than males, particularly female children aged 0 to 9 constituting the largest share in the illustration. As mentioned above, the first female
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group accounted for the largest proportion, at 51.4%, which is similar to its counterpart, the male group with 50.3%. 42.2% of female teenagers, the second largest group, spent time riding bicycles, nearly double the figure for males, at 24.6%. Turning to the remaining
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groups, females continue to exceed males. Specifically, the percentage for adults between 18 and 39 was 17.1%, significantly surpassing men, at 9.7%.
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, the rates for both genders at the
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of 40-59 were 12.3% and 8.0%, respectively. Regarding the elderly, women used 18.5% of their time to cycle,
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the percentage for men was lower, at 13.2%.
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