The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
These two maps depict the Norbiton industrial
area
and planned development in the
future
. It is clear from the maps that the industrial
area
will be converted into a housing
area
in the
future
.
According to
what is shown, all factories will destroy the planned
future
. In the
future
, the addition of the street will be built across the river with
T-shape
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a T-shape
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.
Also
, the street will be constructed in the Southern of
mape
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Mape
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.
moreover
, many houses will be built in different areas.
Further
, many
faclties
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facilities
will be established
to
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for
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people living there easily
sach
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such
as shops, medical
centre
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centres
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, schools and
playground
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playgrounds
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. From these maps, the farmland will be replaced from the southern to
western
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the western
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area
.
To sum up
, we could say that
this
area
will develop to be a living
area
for many people
instead
of an industrial
area
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, future with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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