The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
The given table illustrates the
number
of
workers
and
factories
in the silk production industry in 2 regions, England and Wales, from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were always more females than males who worked in the silk
factories
over the provided period.
Additionally
,
although
the
number
of
factories
increased, the total
number
of people working in the silk industry fell. Regarding the first 3 decades, the
number
of
factories
in 1851 was 272, with almost 54.000 male
workers
and 76.786 female
workers
. After 10 years, the
factories
nearly tripled in
number
,
while
both the male and female workforce dropped by approximately 11.000 and 8.000
workers
, respectively. From 1861 to 1871, there was a reduction in the
number
of
factories
at
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to
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only 693 in 1871, it was similar for the
number
of employees
where
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but
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there was
also
a fall to 38.102 for males and 53.310 for females. Looking at the following 30 years, there was a slight increase in the
number
of
factories
from 1871 to 1881,
however
, it continued to go down for the rest of the period with only 623
factories
in 1901. Meanwhile,
although
the
number
of
men
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male
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workers
went up slightly to 28.689 by 1891, the women kept decreasing to about 25.500
at the end
of the period.
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