A increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teacher are living their own poorer countries to work in develpoed countries. What problems does this cause ? What solutions can you suggest to deal with problems.
Professional
are increasing nowadays, Fix the agreement mistake
Professionals
for
instance
staff health and teachers are Add the comma(s)
instance,
living
their home low-income Verb problem
leave
country
to go in
Change preposition
to
advanced
nation for Add an article
the advanced
working
. There Replace the word
work
are
some Change the verb form
is
problem
why they move to Fix the agreement mistake
problems
wealthy
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the wealthy
nation
for Fix the agreement mistake
nations
working
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work
due to
low sallary
and Correct your spelling
salary
facility
not adequately to develop their skills.
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facilities
Firstly
, low salary
are Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
reason
why some people move to developed Add an article
the reason
country
, Fix the agreement mistake
countries
for example
Australia and Eropean
because the Correct your spelling
Europe
country
which are offer bigger sallary
than wealthy Correct your spelling
salaries
country
. Fix the agreement mistake
countries
Consequently
, they are interest
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are interested
are interesting
to
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in
life
in Replace the word
living
other
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another country
other countries
country
for occupation. Additionally
, The fasility
adequately in developed Correct your spelling
facility
country
which they are increasing skills to learn regarding their major. After that, they Fix the agreement mistake
countries
got
experience and Wrong verb form
get
knowladge
Correct your spelling
knowledge
are
back Verb problem
to go
their
home Change preposition
to their
country
to make
small Verb problem
run
business
, Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
for
example
Clinic and Store Add the comma(s)
example,
drug
. Fix the agreement mistake
drugs
As a result
, they can help their economical
Correct word choice
economic
familly
.
Meanwhile, Correct your spelling
family
Developing
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the Developing
nation
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nations
had
the lowest wage, so most people lack Wrong verb form
have
of
motivation to work and focus Remove the preposition
apply
due to
pay is not enought
to cover Correct your spelling
enough
living
Add an article
the living
cost
, Change the noun form
costs
such
as cost
Correct article usage
the cost
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of accomodation
accomodation
and transportation. Correct your spelling
accommodation
Therefore
, they have challenging
to enhance their competence. Replace the word
challenges
Furthermore
, some fasility
not Correct your spelling
facility
adequately
in Change the word
adequate
poor
Add an article
the poor
country
because of that nursing and doctor can Fix the agreement mistake
countries
increase
their skills since the fasility
is not Correct your spelling
facility
suporting themselve
. Correct your spelling
supporting themselves
As a result
, they do not increase
their ability if they stay in the
home Change the word
their
country
.
To sum up
, people stay in Low-income
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a Low-income
country
which have problems to
Change the verb form
increasing
increase
their skill
because of Fix the agreement mistake
skills
lowest
wages and Correct article usage
the lowest
facility
not Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
Add a missing verb
being adequately
adequately
, so that most staff health moved to the developed Change the word
adequate
country
to get new
job Add an article
a new
then
they will increase
their knowladge
and Correct your spelling
knowledge
experince
.Correct your spelling
experience
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examples
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task response
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