IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetable per day in the uk from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetable per day in the uk from 2001 to 2008
#percentage #people #five #portions #fruit #vegetable #uk
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The chart gives information about the proportion of
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
 who ate 5 per
cent
 of
eaten
Verb problem
apply
show examples
fruit and vegetables each day in the
Uk
Correct your spelling
UK
show examples
 between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, the cart illustrated three categories
childern
Correct your spelling
children
,
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
show examples
 and
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
 who usually
eating
Wrong verb form
eat
show examples
 fruit and
vegetable
Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
show examples
 every day
in
Change preposition
for
show examples
 a week . It
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
can be seen that in the picture in
2006
Add a comma
2006,
show examples
 the women's rate was the highest per
cent
in contrast
 during of three years from 2001 to 2003 the children's rate was the lowest
protion
Correct your spelling
portion
.
Gereally
Correct your spelling
Generally
 speaking , the figure
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 women
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
increased gradually
that
Correct word choice
and
show examples
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
 to top
per
Change preposition
apply
show examples
cent
 in the year 2006 it was
that
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
35% after that , it down
in
Change the preposition
at
show examples
 the end of
period
Add an article
the period
show examples
 . On the
onther
Correct your spelling
other
hand
Add a comma
hand,
show examples
 the number of
man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
show examples
 and
childern
Correct your spelling
children
 was
similarly
Change the word
similar
show examples
 in the first three years in the chart
Add the comma(s)
, in addition,
show examples
in addition
 they remained stale
subsequently
, the green line and yellow line
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
rose dramatically until in the year 2007
moreover
 the men and the children
are
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
 downwards slightly to reach above 25% and under twenty-five per
cent
 respectively.
Submitted by sialamer on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: